Showing posts with label unsuccessful writing exercise. Show all posts
Showing posts with label unsuccessful writing exercise. Show all posts

Wednesday, April 24, 2013

Neil



 The trigger first sentence came form J.J. Parris's Sacrilege. My writing mate did a brilliant piece of writing where she kept repeating, "I couldn't tell them about..." and used wonderful details of smell and dark and light.

“I remember him,” I said.

And I did. What I didn’t say was I also had hated him. We’d worked together for five years in back to back to cubicles. Those cubicles I’d hated too. When I found mine each morning, I felt like an experimental mouse running through a maze for a piece of cheese, only in my case, the cheese was a paycheck, if you could call it that. I’d needed a second job, which was a sales person at Charette Art.

I envied the painters who came in with their clothes often spattered with miscellaneous colors. Finally, I used my employee discount to buy a set of acrylics and a canvas to try and paint myself. I wish I could say, there was a hidden talent. 

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There wasn’t, but that had led me to meeting Jim, and that led me to work at his gallery, which I inherited when Jim died and I never had to live in little cubicles again.

Which brings me back to the woman standing before me asking me if I remember Neil. “He said he used to work with you.

I nodded not noncommittally. Since she might be a buyer and I didn’t know what Neil was too her I didn’t want to tell her about his voice booming on telephone calls. So much for sound deadening panels. And the smells of the food he brought in, especially the garlic, made me wish for windows to open, but the building was sealed. Even if I could have opened a window, they were a sea of cubicles away and air would ever have reached my space.

“How did you stand him?” she asked. “He’s such a pig, a bully. But I thought he was lying when he said he knew the owner of the gallery.”

“How did it come up?” I asked.

“I’m in the cubicle next to him. He saw the invitation to the exhibition on my desk and after that it was brag, brag.”

“Sounds like Neil,” I said. 

She pointed to a couple that just walked in. “Better go to your next client,” she said.

Monday, February 4, 2013

The Raid

Neither my writing mate or I could get much done with this one. Sometimes the ideas don't come. The line is from John Grishom's short stories. One good thing about writing exercises when one is free writing, it doesn't have to be good. The pencil or in my cases, the fingers just need to keep moving. Like the ending, I didn't know what to do with it.



Whatever, I’ve seen worse but not by much.

I stood by the police wagon as the club participants were rounded up. There were mostly men and a few women, probably the waitresses considering their clothes. Ooops, there’s Betty, my neighbor. I’ll pretend I didn’t see her. I didn't know she worked here.

No one was really drunk, but they weren’t totally sober. Some seemed high on something, probably Coke.

Gabe, the cop who alerted me that the raid was about to happen, winked at me as he cuffed a man who kept saying, “Do you know who I am?” My editor, yelled at me as I rushed out of the paper saying I had a lead and I’d explain later.


What do I mean by worse? There was something C movie about the scene. One of the old cops was carrying out a roulette wheel. Who’d have thunk it. A gambling den in Bear’s Foot, Wyoming. 

What amazed me were the people. They weren’t local by any means. Some must have come over from the fancy dancy ski lodge down the road about thirty miles. Their clothes were much too brand name with brands no one here could afford. Our little town had grown when the ski lodge went up because prices of real estate meant that no one could afford to live there.

Meanwhile I was using my phone to snap photos. I got one of Gabe. The least I could do was to make him a hero in the town paper.

I wonder what I can do with the story. There has to be a moral in there somewhere, just not sure what it is.